There's a lot of experimental stuff going on with this track, and not a whole lot of melodic components, in fact most of it is dissonant. The overall bitcrushed vibe is interesting and it does a lot, but it quickly gets overshadowed by the other things going on. If you could structure it out a bit more, work more on some chords, melodies, harmonies, maybe re-sample them and chop them around I'm sure you could come up with some amazing sounding concepts. The mix isn't bad, but it doesn't do too much either as the sounds you use are pretty dry. You can keep your dystopian/otherwordly vibe and still have harmony and melodies that are in the front of your track. Until then, my score is 5.8/10 but don't let it discourage you! Work around with different ideas, keep making music and I'm sure you'll improve a lot:)